英语强人来,请改下我的演讲稿,以下是我的关于"Australia as we know"的演讲稿(可能其中会有些语法错误

Australia as we know
Australia which is the sixth largest country in the world lies in Oceania.
Australia once invaded by Britain does not have a long histroy.and bacame the colony of Britain.People in Austria could not stand it any more,as a result,they started to fight for their independence.Finally,they succeeded,and Australia gained their own National Day,Jan.26th.
.In addition,Australia,as a developed Country,its population has reached to nearly 22 million.And by the way,Australia is undergoing a very fast pace of development.
I strongly believe in that the cooperation between Australia and China will be more harmonious and prosperous.As two of the largest countries in the world,the two big countries will both lead the world to the new century.
That's all.
Last but not the least,I sincerely thank you for your listening.
Thanks!
看楼主写作文的习惯,我退出楼主还是初中生吧,作文中有一些低级错误,而且用词太过简单,句型都是短句,好像你不太善于使用复杂句式.但是要知道,在作文中想得高分一定要有亮点.何为亮点?第一,要习惯使用高级词汇,一般出现在四六级中的词汇都属于高级词汇,这样会让阅卷老师觉得你词汇量很多.第二,要熟练使用复杂句式,如定语从句,宾语从句等.把简单的短句子用复杂句式表达出来会展现出你的英语功底,看起来也更地道.第三,叙事要清楚,切勿赘述.能用一句话解释清楚的话就不要用一段话来反复说明.要条理清楚,给阅卷老师耳目一新的感觉.第四,如果以上几点都能做到的话,建议你在作文中适当修饰一下.就是用一些比较高级的词组来点缀你的句子,让句子看起来长一点,地道一点,高级一点.这样写的出来的作文分一定低不了的.

1. stands on Oceania改为stand in Oceania
2. In the long history river改为In its long history,你的是中国式英语
3.Australia once was invaded by Britain改为Australia was ever invaded by Britain,
4.Inadditi...

Australia,the sixth largest countr(ies) in the world,stands on Oceania.
In the long history river,Australia once was invaded by Britain.At last,it became the colony of Britain.Of course,Austra...

Australia as we know
Australia, the sixth largest country in the world, stands on Oceania.
In its history, (你的那种说法是典型的中国式英语)Australia was once invaded by Britain. At last, it became th...

Australia as we know
Australia, the sixth largest country in the world, stands on Oceania.
In the long history river, Australia once was invaded by Britain. At last, it became the colo...

我对此不是很精通，不过我的同学在新东方上了课后。新东方给了他们一张“批改卡”。是新东方旗下的一个专门批改作文的网站：新东方批改网。你可以看看

最致命的问题。。。你把英语当中文了，in the long histiry river难道是在历史的长河中吗？错误有一些，比如the sixth largest country in the world，前面应该加个as,没有its population这个用法，应该是the population of 什么什么的. I strongly believe that the cooperation ...

Australia as we know
Australia, the sixth largest country in the world,stands on Oceania.
In the long history river, Australia once was invaded by Britain. At last, it became a british...

Australia as we know
Australia,the sixth largest country in the world, ( lies in) Oceania.
In the long history river,Australia ( was once ruled/governed ) ...

Australia as we know
As the sixth largest country in the world，Australia lies in Oceania.
Australia does not have a long histroy，it was once invaded by Britain.And before long it bacame th...

Australia as we know
There used to be a joke, which goes like this: Australians are always at lost about whether they live in the world largest island or the smallest inland. Australia,the sixth l...

,stands on Oceania.改成 standing on ..
In other word改正in the other word
That's all.
Last but no least,I sincerely thank you for your listening.
Thanks!改下，累赘啊，that's all thanks.