晨曦的甘露
幼苗
共回答了18个问题采纳率:83.3% 举报
一,如果是作为一篇开学后上交的关于寒假做了什么事情的作文,那么应该是用一般过去时态.
二,其它语法问题按句来说:
1.go to the cinema=see a film,这一句啰嗦了.另外,十有七八才用often,你真的10天中有7天去看电影吗?建议改成:I sometimes went to the cinema with...
2.这一句语法没错,但如果在后面加in the morning/afternoon之类,则更顺口,更符合实情,也凑多几个字数.建议改成:I usually did my homework in the morning.
3.语法 也没错.改时态就好了:helped
4,本身语法没错,但用在这里就大错特错了.这个句型是对将来有可能发生的事情进行假设.
建议改成:I liked parties so I had parties at home as often as possible.(尽可能地经常,表示一有空就做某事)
5.can invite 改成invited,另外invite to 后面可以加活动名称,再用come to就啰嗦了.
建议改成:I invited my friends to the parties.学过被动语态就改成:Many of my friends were invited to come/to the parties.用to come而不用to the party是因为上一句用了两个parties,写作文尽量不重复用词.
6.最后两句合成一句:do 改成did,such 前面用逗号隔开,as后面的动词要改为动名词,最后要用and so on.(等等,等等)
建议改成:At the parties,we always did a lot of things,such as having healthy food and drink,singing English songs and so on.
三,最后,就是润色.如:作文前后呼应一下:I had a very interesting winter vacation.I enjoyed it very much.之类的.
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