作文修改,急.(2)After that “seven years” period,their children gro

作文修改,急.(2)
After that “seven years” period,their children grow up.Their children will start joining their family communications.They will try to express their feeling in the family.At that moment,the family’s communications are very effective because each person’s request can to be considered.Each person’s opinion can to be heard.
Then,their children will face the “adolescent period”.In that period,children always have a lot of trouble.Maybe they face to the “first love” situation; maybe they are worried about their future; maybe they are worried about their GPA in school.Another trouble in psychological field is that they children don’t have enough good attitudes for their lives.Maybe they feel envious others,or they find no self- confidence.They shame to communicate with their families,and they always lock the door instead.
After passing that period,their children get mature.They have their mature social view and opinion for their lives.Now in their family,the family’s conversation always shows the love from the parents.
At last,when their children get married,the family turns back to be two people conversation.Their communication is focused on their lives.They will warmly talk to the partner with .
Above processes is the development of family communications.People can easily find the same characteristics in the family communications.Each person’s request needs to be considered.Each person’s opinion needs to be heard.[1] Families must learn to compromise,because it is impossible for everyone’s needs to be met all the time.[1] To come up with “win/win solutions,” family members need good communication skills--so that everyone’s point of view and suggestions are expressed clearly and heard by the other family members.[1]
Now I will pick up a converse case from my family.By analyzing my family,you will know what the bad family communications is.
I was born in 1987.When I was younger,I had a good family before.At that moment,my parents loved each other.However,when I was 14,I heard that they always argued at home.First,they cannot listen to other’s talking because sometimes they cannot accept other’s opinion.They don’t know how to compromise.Second,they cannot resolve daily conflicts.They make a lot of family conversation with shouting instead of dealing the problems they fact to.In fact,each person’s request needs to be considered and each person’s opinion needs to be heard in the family conversation; however,my complaint they didn’t hear.At last,they were divorced,and I finally relaxed from those family communications.
Actually,many people have a good family.Having good communication is very helpful for our lives.A family not only can help you when you face trouble,it also can give you the belief and energy.I hope you find this information helpful for your family communications.
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xxzzyy 幼苗

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After that “seven years” period,their children grow up.Their children will start joining their family communications.They will try to express their feelings(加s) in the family.At that moment,the family’s communications are very effective because each family member’s(person改为family member) request can (to省去) be considered,and each member’s(同上) opinion can to be heard.
Then,their children will face the “adolescent period”when( In that period改为when,引导定语从句)they(children改为they)always have (a lot of 去掉)trouble.Maybe they face (to去掉) the “first love” situation; Maybe they are worried about their future,(maybe they are worried about 改为as well as以免重复)their GPA in school.Another trouble in psychological field is that they children don’t have enough good attitudes towards(for改为towards) their life(lives改为life).Maybe they feel envious others,or they find no self- confidence.They shame to communicate with their families,and they sometimes(always改为sometimes) lock themselves in the room.
(After passing去掉)As that period passes by,their children get mature.They have their mature social views(加s)( and opinion去掉) about(for改为about) their life(lives改为life).Now in their families(family改为families),the children(family’s conversation改为children) always shows the love to(from改为to) their (the改为their) parents.
(At last去掉) When the(theirs改为the) children get married,the family turn back to be two people conversation.Their communication is focused on their life(lives改为life).They will warmly talk to their partners .
Above processes is the development of family communications.People can easily find the same characteristics in the family communications.Each person’s request needs to be considered.Each person’s opinion needs to be heard.[1] Families must learn to compromise,because it is impossible for everyone’s needs to be met all the time.[1] To come up with “win/win solutions,” family members need good communication skills--so that everyone’s point of view and suggestions are expressed clearly and heard by the other family members.[1]
Now I will pick up a converse case from my family.By analyzing my family,you will know what the bad family communications is.
I was born in 1987.When I was younger,I had a good family before.At that moment,my parents loved each other.However,when I was 14,I heard that they always argued at home.First,they cannot listen to other’s talking because sometimes they cannot accept other’s opinion.They don’t know how to compromise.Second,they cannot resolve daily conflicts.They make a lot of family conversation with shouting instead of dealing the problems they fact to.In fact,each person’s request needs to be considered and each person’s opinion needs to be heard in the family conversation; however,my complaint they didn’t hear.At last,they were divorced,and I finally relaxed from those family communications.
Actually,many people have a good family.Having good communication is very helpful to( for改为to) our life(lives改为life).A family can(can放在not only之前)not only help you when you face trouble,but(it改为but) also (can去掉)give you the belief and energy.I hope you find this information helpful for your family communications.

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文明示范员小明 幼苗

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第一行就错 英语有那种双引号吗
第二行 后面They will try to express their feelings in families
第四行 each person's request
can后面不能加天to = =
can不加to
第六行 troubles , situations ,futures ,GPAs ...

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tianyaa 幼苗

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2、3楼只是简单的为lz做了修改。总的来说,lz写的确实把想说的都说明了。但是我帮忙逐字逐句都作了个较大改动,您通篇读一遍就知道了。我长期生活在美国,希望有所帮助。
After that “seven-year” period, their children would grow up, starting joining the family communications. They wi...

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82874324 幼苗

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你写的很好

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