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The pie graph describes the financial consumption on the snack food in brazil whilst the line graph demonstrates the variation used in different kinds of foods.
As shown in the data ,the wealthy like the hamburgers most when the consumption of hamburgers reach at 40(pence per person per week) .Whereas,the expense of fish and chips resembling to pizza only account for approximately 17 pence,19 pence respectively midst the rich.The tendency of the middle class sew similar to the wealthy,i.e,hamburgers ,fish and chips,pizza occupy about 32 pence,25 pence,12 pence respectively.Duo to the lack of the disposable money,these three kinds of snacks are carefully consumed at a low amount among the poor.
Accordingly to the line graph,the expense of hamburgers being used increase in a staggering rate from 1970 to 1990.Besides,fish and chips experience a decline during the same period.Then the pizza remain stable under 100 grammes upon 1970 to around 1982.From this point onwards,pizza consumption rise and amount to approximately 150 grammes in 1990.
It is manifest from the two graph that the enormous consumption of hamburgers ascribe to the favor of all classes of people.And the less interests of the consumers contribute to the low quantity of other two snacks.
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