自己写了一个英语句子,请高手帮忙看有什么语法错误没.或者有什么更好的表达方式.

①【从句】第一个定语从句（修饰society ）用对了.第二个定语从句（which makes us tired）如果是修饰cheat,那就没问题,如果是修饰competition and cheat ,makes就要改为make.
②【介词搭配】in home 应改为 at home ,注意介词的搭配.
③【词形转换】“the comfortable would be really to come into being” 中的comfortable 是 形容词,不能做主语,应改为其名词：comfort.
④【特殊句式】Only when 句型,主句应用部分倒装：Only when we are at home ,would the comfort really come into being.
总体句子结构不错.但是写句子是要注意：人称、时态、连词的使用、介词的搭配还有特殊句式等等.
希望能够帮到您!

每个人的英语习惯不一样，写的句子也不一样，你有几个语法错误
The society we lived filled with competition and cheat,which makes us tired. Only when we at home, would the comfortable really came into being.
only+状语位于句首，句子...

in home
是一个错误用法，at home是正确的，表示“在家”
固定的词组搭配……

“only when we are in home"中的”in"应该为“at”
其余的都对了
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这句话这样说会更好： We live in a society which is filled with so much competition and fraud that we can easily feel tired. Only when we are at home can we have a sense of comfort.

in home应改为at home

we live in a society that is filled with competition and CHEATMENT which make us tired . only when we are at home , the comfort would be real to come into being .
你在形容词和名词或者副词的使用上把握似乎不太准确，应该是语感的问题...