要口试了,英文好的大侠帮我改改写的短文

要口试了,英文好的大侠帮我改改写的短文
估计有好多错啦
what will you do to make yourself more beautiful?
i think i will be on a diet to make my figure more symmetrical.
then i will buy some beautiful clothes to dress up myself .
maybe i also can use a little cosmetic.
the most important things to make myself more beautiful is having confidence.
people who is confident is the most beautiful
furthermore ,i will read more book because i think if i have much knoeledge,others will like me more (这个估计用错了,更喜欢我怎么说啊?)and i will be more beautiful in others' eyes.
剑_宇 1年前 已收到4个回答 举报

ymdw 幼苗

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i think that i'm going to go on a diet to make myself more slime.
then,i will buy some beautiful clothes to dress myself up .
maybe i will also use a little cosmetic.
However,the most important thing i need to make myself more beautiful is confidence.
people who are confident are the most beautiful.
furthermore ,i will read more book because i think if i broaden my horizon,the others will like me more and i will be more beautiful in others' eyes.口语中不要用太过书面的词,还有你查了电子词典的痕迹很重

1年前

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虾片 幼苗

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可以把will全改成shall或者would,will显得有些生硬。
第二句改成i shall buy myself ···to···
第四行前面加个while转折下,把things的s去掉
第五行去掉,太冗余了
第六行futhermore,i may···,更通顺些,book后面加上s。
最后一句,可以写成:because the clever guys ...

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严肃可怕的面罩 幼苗

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知识拼错了 是knowledge
更喜欢我应该是like me better
然后你第三点是要化妆么 我觉得wear some makeup会比较地道
还有第四行有个语法错误 应该是the most important thing 不是things
第五行单复数用错了 而且最后少个代词 应该是people who are confident are the most...

1年前

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糖罐lulu 幼苗

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i think(加first of all 更有层次) i will (be去掉,不用被动) on a diet to (make my figure more symmetrical最好改成shape my figure).then i will buy some beautiful clothes to (dress up myself改成dress me up更好) .maybe i(加wi...

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