请改改语法 这篇文章是我的英语作文,求大侠帮我改改.

请改改语法 这篇文章是我的英语作文,求大侠帮我改改.
my name is ..,i`m from Zigong city of Sichuan province,i was graduated from zigong NO.14 Vocational High school in 2009.my major is electronic.
i`m a outgoing girl,i like learning new things,i`m good at Chinese,but English is not good.my hobbies are listening to music.play game and swimming.But i can`t swim,i`m learing to swim.i don`t have much time for my hobbies,Work makes me feel busy and tired.
waiter was my first job,secoud was a office girl,the third was a sales girl.But i`m a mould engineer now,i love this job ,because let me full my life and happy.