SOS: revise my essay

SOS: revise my essay
My Beloved Father
There is a famous saying that father is daughter's lover in the previous life. Maybe that is why I am my father's daughter in this life. And nothing can express my love for you, my father!
My father is a typical Chinese man. He has brown eyes, big mouse, yellow even a little dark skin because of the heated sun. He has a big nose which has been inherited to me, matching properly with our faces. Of course, I don't think the big nose is ugly, instead, I enjoyed the big nose, because it is our special character, which is unique in the world. And his hair used to be very black and. While, nowadays his black hair has been gradually turning to white with the increasing of age. Now, he has been in his late forties. Besides, I also believe it is not only because of it, but also because of his toilsome unselfishness to the family. And what I like most is his mustache. I can still remember that when I was a kid, he usually rubbed my little face with his bushy but tidy beard, which always made me laugh. How happy it was! He looks so handsome in his casual clothes because he has a proper figure with an average height.
He is also an ordinary person. He has to work hard to earn money to surpport the family. He usually has to worry whether the money can afford to pay the tuition of his children. He is willing th do everything for the family. He always telephone me to tell me to live a good life again and again. He cares about us more than himself. He is not so healthy, while he think it too expensive to consult the doctors. And he just suffers his pain, which always makes me feel heartache. In my eyes, he is a great father like most fathers in the world. And he is my most beloved father who can't be replaced by anyone in the world. Whenever I need his love, he gives me all of his love without hesitation. Whenever I need his help, his tries his best to help me out of trouble. He has devoted all his time to the family.
I love you, father! You are the sunshine shining into my whole life! You always says that, my happiness is your happiness. But your happiness is really my happiness.
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zhrtjol 幼苗

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previous life可以直接prelife;
heated sun---sun不是被heated的,而是能heating别物的,所以heating sun才对;
is ugly,instead------,应该;
our special character---characteristic trait;
You always says .he think it .----number
the following is the most serious:
very black and.While,nowadays his black hai

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revise: 1.in the prelife 2.heating sun 3.instead I enjoy my big nose, 4.our special characteristic traits 5.you always say--------- he thinks it----------- 6.very black and thick.
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