帮忙看看这两句英语有没有语法错误什么滴?

帮忙看看这两句英语有没有语法错误什么滴?
1.Dear teacher,thank you for illuminating my voyage of life with your own light of life.My grateful sentiments come from the bottom of my heart.
2.You are the spring shower that moistens our hearts.On the voyage of life,you have kindled the light of hope for me.What you have done enriches my mind and broadens my view.On this day I honour you sincerely.
加点分，呵呵