我写了一篇英语作文,却没人愿意给我批改,所以想请百度的各位大侠们给我批改下.作文在问题补充中.

我写了一篇英语作文,却没人愿意给我批改,所以想请百度的各位大侠们给我批改下.作文在问题补充中.
Two pie charts illustrate five activities that Europe people like to spand in their spare time in 1985 and in 1995.The generally,watch tv alway popular among Europe people in 1985 and in 1995,because it account for the larest proportion of two pie charts ,at 32 percent and 30 percent respectively.
In 1985,Europe people’s the second most popular thing is going to restaurant,and this makes up 23 percent of the total survey.Talking with friend and talking with family maintain the middle position,only 21 and 18 percent people choose talking with friend and family in their leisure time respectively.The less popular thing is other activity,and it has 6 percent in the pie chart.
In 1995,Europe people like playing computer game when they have leisure time,because it is the second most popular thing,with 27 percent.This is follow by talking with friend ,which represent 26 percent in the pie chart.Only 8 and 7 percent people like going to restaurant and talking with family in their spare time respetively.The less popular thing is other thing,and it has 2 percent of all.
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青悟空 幼苗

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(Note : suggest to use past tense)
Two pie charts illustrate five activities that European people liked to spend in their spare time in 1985 and in 1995. In general, watching TV was always most popular for European people in 1985 and in 1995 because it accounted for the largest proportion of the two pie charts(at 32 percent and 30 percent respectively).
In 1985, the second most popular thing for European people was going to restaurant, and this made up 23 percent of the survey total. Talking with friends and family members maintained the middle position, only 21 and 18 percent people chose talking with friends and family members in their leisure time respectively. The less popular thing was other activities which had 6 percent in the pie chart.
In 1995, European people liked playing computer games when they had leisure time because it was the second most popular thing (27 percent). This was followed by talking with friends which represented 26 percent in the pie chart. Only 8 and 7 percent people liked going to restaurant and talking with family members in their spare time respectively. The least popular thing was 'other thing' which had 2 percent only.

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lv0710 幼苗

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一般需要错误不多才有人会改。建议重写。第一句就出错,很难接着看下去的!不过,希望有人能改。

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air15107 幼苗

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建议你到新东方批改网上改改,都是外教改的
自己写了一篇自我感觉良好的,拿上来粗批一下改的满目疮痕啊。。。。

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