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我帮你重新改一下,里面有很多语法错误.我也帮你加了很多新的用词,听起来比较正规
Scientists have become more and more important to our daily lives,so my dream is to be a scientist in the future.They have invented mobile phones,computers,cars,planes,and so many more things.These inventions make our lives fun and fast.I think I can be a scientist when I grow up.I will invent more inventions that would help to make our lives better.Being a scientist requires a lot of knowledge,so I will study hard and try my best from now on.
I believe I have the ability to become a successful scientist in the future.
纯手打勿复制.我在美国念书5年了放心我的英文,如果你对语法有问题欢迎提问.
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可以在帮我精简一下吗,因为我马上就要参加中考了,中考要求的作文是在80词左右。
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Scientists have become very important to our lives, so my dream is to be a scientist. They have invented mobile phones, computers, planes, and many other things that help to make our lives fast and easy. When I become a scientist, I will invent more inventions that would make our lives better. Being a scientist requires a lot of knowledge, so I will study hard and try my best from now on. I believe I can become a successful scientist in the future. 83 字~ 意思一样就是没有那么华丽。。