下面英语句子是否正确?时态、语法、结构都对吗？还可以再改善吗？

下面英语句子是否正确?时态、语法、结构都对吗？还可以再改善吗？
I I don'tlike visitors coming to my home because I don't like others to disturb privatespace.
When theycome to my home,I shouldclean up my house and I really hate doing so.
Allfamily members usually get together inmy grandfather’home during these festivals.


我不喜欢访问者来我家，因为我不喜欢其他人打扰私人空间.
当他们来我家，我将要打扫我的房子，我真的讨厌做这个.
我的家人庭经常到爷爷家聚会在这些节日里.