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修改如下:
Limiting the Use of Disposable Plastic Bags
With the development of science and technology, more and
解释:science and technology是固定短语,其前面不用加the.
more attention has been brought to disposable plastic bags owing to
解释:“越来越多的塑料袋”不妥,应该是“越来越多的注意”更妥!
its convenience since they were used widely.
解释:此句上下连接有问题,可以用since引导的时间状语从句.此时,主句必须改用现在完成时.
此段稍显单薄,应适当增加对塑料袋的方便性及其目前使用的广泛性的描述.
As the saying goes: every coin has two sides. Recently, pollution
解释:主语用pollution即可,以对应下句的it.
which is made by disposable plastic bags has been brought into public
解释:定语从句的时态用一般现在时更好,因为这是现在存在的普遍情况.
focus. It has the following harm. Firstly, it arouse a
解释:此段讲的是其污染的harm“害处”,不是advantages.
arise是不及物动词,此处应该改为及物动词arouse“引起/唤起”.
series of troubles of many factors from energy sources to water
解释:固定短语 a series of“一系列的”;且此处troubles和from无法连接.
pollution and air pollution. Then, it is harmful to human’s health as well.
解释:两者并列用and即可;what's more和then重复,改用as well“也”.
注:至于“限制一次性塑料袋的意义”,楼主可以从其危害处着手,当然最好去参阅一些参考资料.我就不越殂代疱了,请原谅!
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