这一段英语有没有语法错误But!If your soul is ugly,You have no qualificati

1.You eyes will (go 或者be 反正加个动词,因为UGLY是形容词)ugly,too.be+adj.结构
2.I think you don’t need me to teach you how to become a person,don’t you?（这句DON'T 要提前的,改成 I don’t think you need me to teach you how to become a person,do you?)以后记得哦 don't都要提到THINK前面的.
3、不该用OR 这是选择用词 中文翻译出来合适 英文就不行了 应改成So please think about yourself and maybe I can take you to the hospital.
其他就没有了 加油

第一句中，you have no qualification to criticize me
第三句中，your eyes will be ugly,too
第四句中，把don't you改为do you
下一句中，把can改为will即可

1.no qualification to criticize me.
2.Your eyes will be ugly,too.
3.I don't think you need me to teach you how to become a person, do you?
4. ...or I will take you to the hospital. Or you may dial "120" by yourself.

your eyes will beugly
do you

But！If your soul is ugly，(you are not qualified to criticize me. 或 you don't have the right to criticize me. )
Understand？
You eyes will ugly, too.
（I don't think that you need me to teac...

your eyes are ugly ,too
I suppose that it's unnecessary for me to teach you how to behave yourself，isn't it?(教你如何做人，楼主的翻译有中国式英语的成分)