希望高手可以帮忙看一下————一篇英语作文
希望高手可以帮忙看一下————一篇英语作文
When I am a student in the middle school,I have a dream that have a lot of money.Of course,at first,I must have some knowledge so that I can own a place where I can have money.So I work very hard in the study.In the senior middle school,it impresses to me that the friend between classmates and me.I like the life when I in the class.In that time,we either have happy or have unhappy.In a word,the classmates in a place.It is very good.
Now I have the other dream which is that we can in a place where we spent 3 years.In the end,I look forward to we are succeed.
希望可以找出错误,加以指正.
When I am a student in the middle school,I have a dream that have a lot of money.Of course,at first,I must have some knowledge so that I can own a place where I can have money.So I work very hard in the study.In the senior middle school,it impresses to me that the friend between classmates and me.I like the life when I in the class.In that time,we either have happy or have unhappy.In a word,the classmates in a place.It is very good.
Now I have the other dream which is that we can in a place where we spent 3 years.In the end,I look forward to we are succeed.
希望可以找出错误,加以指正.
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"我在中学时..."显然要用过去时.
我给你改成下面这样,请看看吧:(可能改动较大哦~)
When I was a student in middle school,I had a dream of having a lot of money.Of course,at first,I must have some knowledge so that I can find a job to earn money.So I worked very hard in study.In senior middle school,the friedship among the classmates impressed me.I liked the life in the class.At that time,we had both happy and unhappy.In a word,the classmates being together was very good.
Now I have another dream of being able to staying at a place for 3 years.In the end,I am looking forward to my success.
"我在中学时..."显然要用过去时.
我给你改成下面这样,请看看吧:(可能改动较大哦~)
When I was a student in middle school,I had a dream of having a lot of money.Of course,at first,I must have some knowledge so that I can find a job to earn money.So I worked very hard in study.In senior middle school,the friedship among the classmates impressed me.I liked the life in the class.At that time,we had both happy and unhappy.In a word,the classmates being together was very good.
Now I have another dream of being able to staying at a place for 3 years.In the end,I am looking forward to my success.
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你能帮帮他们吗