求修改考研英语作文（2014年真题 小作文）

求修改考研英语作文（2014年真题 小作文）
今年要考研了，请好心人帮忙修改一下我的英语作文，最好能打个分，然后讲一讲哪里需要改进的，模板和例句什么的我有参考书，就不麻烦了。悬赏的话我们再商量（虽然不多）
小作文：Write a letter of about 100 words to the president of your university, suggesting how to improve students' physical condition.
You should include the details you think necessary.
You shoud write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET.
Do not sign your own name at the end of the letter. Use "Li Ming" instead.
Do not write the address.(10 points)
我的作文：
Dear president,
I’m a student who is learning in this university. Recently,our campus organized a test for students’ physical condition. And I got goodgrades in all subjects. To my surprise, most of my calssmates performed bad inphysical tests. I was confused and asked them why their marks are so low. Theytold me two reasons. One is that they don’t get enough exercise in P.E. class.The other one is that they have few reason to go outside to do exercise. Inorder to solve this problem, I have some suggestions. Firstly, university canorganize more P.E. class or activities of exercise. Then, campus could setprizes for students who perform well in physical test. These are all I canrecommend. If you are interested in my advice, please keep contact with me.
Yours,
Li Ming