英语翻译我性格较外向,乐于助人,有很强的责任心.我是个初出茅庐的新人,工作中多少有不足的地方,但我会虚心学习向人请教,使

这个自我评价总体看起来结构比较凌乱,帮你整理一下结构.
第一部分介绍一下你的个人概况；
第二部分介绍你个人的工作态度以及你的工作特长；
第三部分阐明一下你对未来的期待与展望.
I am xx years old,born in xx province . I was graduated from xx university, my major is xx,
and I got my bachelor degree after my graduation in the year of xx. I spend most of my time on study ,and I have acquired basic knowledge of my major during my school time. (介绍你的过去情况）I'm an outing person ,it's my pleasure to help others,the most important I have a sense of responsibility.(个人概况）
After graduated till now,I am still a rookie(新秀）to the work ,so I have a large space to improve myself.Fortunately ,I will learn to my boss ,colleagues and the people that around me.Then ,I may grow up in an enterprise as soon as possible,my value will reflect to the enterprise completely.I'm in favor of thinking angd creating,also I have a huge sense of team work.So ,I can get along well with my colleagues,I will try to bring mor benefits to my company.
I believe I can make a good performance in the following days. I'm confident that I can succeed. With my hard work and the help of my boss and colleagues,I will adapt to the work quickly.Just trust me ,I will have a great performance in my work,I have the ability.
个人意见,希望能够帮助你.