zoeleelu
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Hello everybody.I'm honoured to be here.this is a stage to show my courage.Ok,maby you want to know me and firt my name is ×××and I'm from ×××.As you can see ,I'm a girl,of fourteen.My mother has told me some interesting stories since I was born,so i still have this hobby today.Books make me wise .Besides,I also like sports.Every moring I run with my parents.Now you maybe think there are three people in my family.You are wrong.There are four!I have a sister who is lazy and doesn't want to get up early in the morning.I think i'm smart because my favorite subject are math,physics and English.In future i want to find a boyfirend from Australia,which will be reallycool,for I hear that foreigners are very firendly aren't they?I can't tell you all about me here because time is not enough.Finally,I also want to say I am happy to join in this competation.I think we can be good firends.That's all.Thank you.
我是高中英语老师,你的短文确实有很多错误.我这里给你认真修改了.楼上的我也看了,依然有语法错误.比如 i'm honoured to be here where has a stage to show my courage.和There has a stage to show my courage.就绝对是错句子.
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Hello, everybody. I'm honoured to be here on the stage to introduce myself to you. My name is ×××and I'm from ×××. I'm a girl of fourteen. My mother has told me some interesting stories since I was born,so I still have this hobby today. Books make me wise. Besides,I also like sports.Every moring I run with my parents. There are four people in my family:my parents,My sister and I. My sister is lazy and doesn't want to get up early in the morning while I'm active and do well in all my subjects,especially in math,physics and English. I’d like to make friends with others and often help others. Well,I can't tell you everything about me here because time is not enough. Finally,I am happy to join in this competation and I believe Iwill win.That's all.Thank you. 试试看,时间不够再删,或者熟练一点,语速快点。