帮忙评一下分,高中英语作文假定你是李华,你班同学决定为小明举办生日聚会.请你写信邀请外教Susan参加,要点包括：1.时

帮忙评一下分,高中英语作文
假定你是李华,你班同学决定为小明举办生日聚会.请你写信邀请外教Susan参加,要点包括：1.时间：周五晚八点至九点
2,地点：学生俱乐部
3,内容：生日歌,蛋糕,游戏

Hi Susan,
We're throwing a surprise party for Xiaoming' birthday(开头已给出）
I’m writing to invite you to the party.And there is something significant you should know:to The party is be held in Students' Club on Friday.It will start at 8:00 pm and last for about an hour.Besides,it will include singing berthday song,eat cake,as well as playing game.We hope that you will accept our invitation and carry a present if it is convenient for you.
You're welcome to come to the great ball.
30分的作文

teeth2006 1年前已收到1个回答举报

YnwHong 幼苗

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朋友你好!很高兴帮你：

问题1：to The party is be held in Students' Club on Friday
应该为：
To the party is be held in Students' Club on this Friday.
(要说明是本周五晚,要不然容易产生歧义,还有大小写问题)
问题2：It will start at 8:00 pm and last for about an hour
应该为：It will start at 8:00 pm and finish at 9:00 pm. And it will take one hour on holding this party!
（注意要完全按照要求写,最好直接写出是几点到几点,如果要写持续多长时间可以另起一句!）
问题3：建议从We hope开始分段写.
问题4：最后一句You're welcome to come to the great ball.可改为：We are extremely happy to see you come to the party!
评分：本文要点齐全,但是部分语句不恰当或者不太通顺,而且没有一些与众不同的精彩句子,但是表达意思明确,要是满分15分可以得到9分!（望采纳!祝你学习进步哦）

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teeth2006 举报

最后一句本是You're welcome to come to the great fun 因为have a great fun=have a great fun ,,,所以替换成ball,并不是想要表达舞会的意思您能帮忙分析下句子结构么

举报 YnwHong

You're welcome to come to the great fun. 译为：欢迎你来和我们一起享受欢乐！（建议你还是写成fun，这样容易理解，一般都不用ball）句子结构：you做主语，be welcome to do 做谓语，to the great fun 做宾语！（望采纳！~）加油

teeth2006 举报

为什么不说。。to have the great fun

举报 YnwHong

可以啊！就是说最好不用ball

teeth2006 举报

You're welcome to come to the great fun 这是什么结构，to the great fun 讲得通么，省略了have 么

举报 YnwHong

你好！to在此表示目的，the在此表示特指，to the great fun 译为“目的是为了这个聚会的乐趣。”在此句中是补充说明一下这个聚会！

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