谁可以帮忙修改英语作文啊?（雅思的）

The bar chart shows during 1950 to 2000 the population of China,the USA and Spain with the projected population figures for 2050.As the graph shows that China has the largest population overall,for instance in 1950 China will have the population of 700 milion,however,the USA has only 200 million people,and even in Spain there were(我不懂为什么要用过去时呢,and 是并列连词,and 的前和后时态应该一直) just 30 million.After the next 50 years,China will still have the largest population of 1200 million,the USA will have the population increases(难道人口会“被增长”吗) to 300 million,Spain will raise to 30 million.Whatever,projected population of China in 2050 will be 1500 million,the fastest growth in those countries.The USA gets the constant raises of 100 millions to 400 millions.However,Spain decreases its population to 35million.
The table shows the information of the life expectancy of these three countries from 1950 to 2000,and the projected figures for 2050.Shown on the table,although China has the largest population but it has the lowest life expectancy,around 70.The USA has the highest life(这里的life是指什么呢?生命的话就应该用复数!但如果是生命,前面的形容词又应该用什么~你想想吧) expectancy during 1950 to 2000,but it will be 3 less then Spain at the year 2050.
问题不大,主要是美国是the USA,有定冠词,修饰人口population用large或small~还有定语的使用====
Life for children
What are the different（用名词!differences） between rich children and normal children?Some people might think rich children are born with wealth,and spoiled they get everything easy without pay.Normal children who live in a less rich family will have more chance（复数!） to experience the society and （be动词要用!）more likely to have the skill to survive.However,my opinion is （改成In玛雅opinion看起来会有水平一点）rich（名词!或者being rich） does not mean of spoiled and will be weak in the society.
Nowadays,richer families are become more serious（严重的?严肃的?） in the education for their children.they start to give them the best circumstance to study,and encourage their children to get into the society.Due to （due to= because of,后面加名词,不加句子!这里如果你要表达“因为”的意思,用because）they are rich they might meet many kind（复数!） of people from （介词加句子难道您不觉得怪么~句子前+that!）they were young.For instance,we could see there are so many parties between the rich,so children will （be动词!）likely to come with their parents and start to know how to face different kind of people.What is more,from the news we can easily to（情态动词后面加不定式~没见过……） find out some rich children’s pocket money is less than the children who come from normal families,even rich children will be sent to the military school to experience the hard situations.Although there are normal children in less money families they could also be spoiled,from the news we can see there were many not rich children suicide,just because there got hurt from teachers or parents.
Even there are many rich people would like to train their children to be strong in the society,there are still some spoiled rich child（前面用了are这里应该用复数） in the world.Living under the money their parents earns without any realization of life.
In conclusion,life is not easy,（在没有连词的情况下这样的俩句子应该用句号隔开!）both rich and normal children need to be recognized.Rich does not mean weak in surviving in the society,also poor does not mean （be动词!being!关于mean的用法,如：Being late means being punished!迟到意味着受惩罚,注意Being动词!）strong.
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