英语文章的时态问题文章如下：I once shared with myfriends some of my though

英语文章的时态问题
文章如下：I once shared with myfriends some of my thoughts about learning english.firstly learning english is like building a house. Layying a srong foundation is the first and most important step .In other words,you should read and speak english every day.After than memorizing new words is also helpful like building a house ,learning english takes some time.So don't be impatient.Finally remember "Rome wasn;t built in a day" 请问这篇文章时态这样写可以吗？还是有什幺更正的，求更正，谢谢。