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Reasons for go shopping
Ladies and girls that go shopping have a lot of reasons. In my opinion, there are three main reasons for going shopping. Firstly, going shopping can make me relax then I can forget all the trouble around me. For example, when I feel tired of something, spending money enables me to obtain the relaxation. Another reason is I can find new things from shopping. Everyone wants themselves to be lookde perfect. Women want to have their best side to demonstrate to others. The final reason is I can do exercise. For instance,when I go shopping, I usually walk for several hours but I don’t feel very tired. Meanwhile, I do exercise during the shopping. In conclusion, going shopping has many advantages. When I go shopping, I usually feel very excited. It can make me happy. I love it.
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Reasons for go shopping
Ladies and girls go shopping has a lot of reasons. In my opinion, there are three main reasons for shopping. Firstly, go shopping can make us relaxed then we can forget al...

Reason for shopping
Ladies and girls going shopping had a lot of reasons. In my opinion, there are three main reasons for shopping. The first, shopping can relax our body and then drive out all t...

Reason for go shopping
Ladies and girls go shopping having a lot of reasons.In my opinion,
there are three main reasons for go shopping. The first, go shopping can make me relax then I can f...

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第一个go--going
第二行 第一个go--going
第三行trouble--troubles
第四行spend--spending
第六行themselves looks----to be looked更顺口一些
side--aspect
第七行Such as--For exmpleinstantce
第九行exe...