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第1段
1.1
During the Ming Dynasty, a study in Beijing to the west of the town, there is a pair of good friends. [修改]
[学习提示] 易混词汇: friend, mate, acquaintance, pal 都有“朋友”之意.
1.2
They have strenuously hard reading, an own goal, that is admitted to the top, the other is not the goal. [修改]
[句子错误] 本句语法不规范,请检查!
[名词错误] 冠词错误,an own不规范,建议修改.
[搭配统计] 动名搭配 have...reading 在教材中出现过 265 次
[学习提示] 易混词汇: aim, goal, purpose, end, target, object, objective 均有“目标,目的”之意.
[批改提示] admit意思为“允许,准许进入”注意与permit区别.详情点击
1.3
Target man asked the man without a goal: "why didn't you target? " [修改]
[低频警示] the man without a goal 在语料库中无此用法,疑似中式英语
[搭配统计] 动名搭配 ask...man 在教材中出现过 352 次
[学习提示] 易混词汇: ask, beg, demand, require, request, implore, claim, pray, entreat 均有“要求,请求”之意.
1.4
Unexpectedly, the man said: "man wrong, what is the use of a goal, all knowledge in the chest, there is no goal no. [修改]
[学习提示] 易混词汇: breast, bosom, chest 均含“胸,胸部”之意.
1.5
" The thing that day, people with a goal in the first place, and the other who didn't even a Jinshi, spend half in and, busy life. [修改]
[低频警示] busy...life 在语料库中无此用法,疑似中式英语
[学习提示] 易混词汇: aim, goal, purpose, end, target, object, objective 均有“目标,目的”之意.
[批改提示] people表示“人,民族”.查看与person的区别.
[批改提示] 查看who和whoever,whom的区别.
1.6
This is no difference between the target, target man float upon the clouds, man without a goal is life-long regret. [修改]
[学习提示] 易混词汇: aim, goal, purpose, end, target, object, objective 均有“目标,目的”之意.
[批改提示] 注意difference和disparity,distinction区别.
第2段
2.1
This is a small story is simple and easy to understand, but we can figure out some learning from nature. [修改]
[句子错误] 本句语法不规范,请检查!
[低频警示] some learning from nature 在语料库中无此用法,疑似中式英语
[学习提示] 易混词汇: simple, easy 均含“简单的,轻易的”之意.
[其他] small的近义表达有minor/insignificant等.
[批改提示] understand的近义表达有appreciate.
2.2
In the era of fierce competition between the loser and winner of today's talent, really only one step away, that is, there is no goal. [修改]
[低频警示] fierce competition between the loser 在语料库中无此用法,疑似中式英语
[学习提示] 易混词汇: competition, contest, match 均有“比赛,竞争”之意.
2.3
We are also learning, according to the intelligence difference between scientists study of people is not large, but why people between learning achievement was different? [修改]
[低频警示] the intelligence difference 在语料库中无此用法,疑似中式英语
[学习提示] 易混词汇: agree, accord, coincide, conform, correspond 均含“符合,一致”之意.
[批改提示] learn近义表达有take in/ absorb/ ingest/ acquire
[批改提示] according to在做“根据”讲时,近义表达有in accordance with.
[批改提示] large的同意表达有miraculous或marvelous .
2.4
The key is to have the learning objectives. [修改]
[搭配统计] 动名搭配 have...objective 在教材中出现过 385 次
[学习提示] 易混词汇: aim, goal, purpose, end, target, object, objective 均有“目标,目的”之意.
2.5
With learning goals, there is hope, there is the power of the struggle. [修改]
[学习提示] 易混词汇: aim, goal, purpose, end, target, object, objective 均有“目标,目的”之意.
2.6
This power encouraged us not to give up every day, every hour, every minute. [修改]
[学习提示] 易混词汇: encourage, inspire, excite, stimulate 均表“鼓励,激励”之意.
2.7
Every small success are shortened and the front target distance. [修改]
[动词错误] 主谓不一致,请检查Every small success are,动词建议用第三人称单数.
[低频警示] shorten...success 在语料库中无此用法,疑似中式英语
[低频警示] target...distance 在语料库中无此用法,疑似中式英语
[低频警示] the front target distance 在语料库中无此用法,疑似中式英语
[学习提示] 易混词汇: each, every 都有“每一个”之意.
2.8
Success motivation, success, step two, we do not give up, we keep on going. [修改]
[句子错误] 句中不同单句之间需要添加连词.
[学习提示] 易混词汇: give, accord, award, confer,grant, endow, present, bestow 均含有“给予,赠给”之意.
[批改提示] keep近义表达有hold/ maintain/ preserve/ sustain
第3段
3.1
The most fundamental outstanding person and the mediocre talent difference is not, nor is the opportunity, but there is [修改]
[动词错误] 主谓不一致,请检查The most fundamental outstanding person and the mediocre talent difference is,谓语动词建议用复数.
[句子错误] 本句语法不规范,请检查!
[句子错误] 句子不完整
[低频警示] fundamental...person 在语料库中无此用法,疑似中式英语
[低频警示] the mediocre talent difference 在语料库中无此用法,疑似中式英语