英语作文求修改,最重要的是第一段和最后一段,希望可以修改的好一点.还有就是最后的结尾有点潦草了,希望可以再加一些内容,S

本人稍微改了下阁下的墨笔,然后加了些句子,请别介意
Superstitions are old-fashioned.Discuss.
In this age of technology there are still so much superstitions which exist in our life.For example,the double "4" will not used by the car plate nunber,because people think that double '4' is the meaning of death.They believe superstitions because they want to avoid bad luck,or get good luck.However,Nowadays,superstitions is little talked by people under the rapid development of science.And superstitions have gradually been replaced by science.But,has superstition really obsoleted?（只有多用从句把句子加长阅卷人才会知道你的功底.
I take the view that superstitions aren’t old-fashioned,because many young people know and believe some superstitions.And I think not all superstitions are wrong.For example,eat an apple a day or eating fish are good for health,as well don’t walking under aladder,because it could be dangerous.(证明迷信不过时的列子好像不具代表性哦,介意修改
On the other hand,people nolonger believe superstitions,because there isn’t scientific basis for superstitions.Nothing is difficult in the world if you put your heart into it(世上无难事,只怕有心人,多写漂亮的句子放在作为中也是加分的一大利器哦.They believe themselves.There also data show that superstitions usually develop inchildhood and children are generally affected by their parents.With thedevelopment of science,parents already have the right idea,so the number ofthe children who believe in superstitions will be less and less.
To sum up,I’m clear from my bottom of my heart that people will always believe in superstitions forever.翻译过来就是 我打心底觉得迷信永存于人心间.（结尾好像还少了点什么,感觉还是有点草草结束,自己加点东西吧

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