不确定写英文邮件的习惯,英文高手看一下以下这封信有没有语法,格式,拼写或者其他错误

不确定写英文邮件的习惯,英文高手看一下以下这封信有没有语法,格式,拼写或者其他错误
Dear Ms.Lori
My name is xxx from the P.R of China.I have sent my high school transcript and the application fee to u in March of 2008.How is the case going on mow I (was)?(am)?wordering if the assistant coach help this case is ok with u.Do i need to do anything else if necessary?
sincerely
XXX
这封电邮写个什么主题好类?