哪位英语高人能帮我检查一下这篇电邮
哪位英语高人能帮我检查一下这篇电邮
这是我写给帮我申请暑期实习的一个远亲的邮件,我们之间不是太熟,对方比我大,已工作,是外资企业的白领.我主要想催问一下实习的事怎么说,成了没,还有表达一下即使不成也没关系.希望各位英语达人能帮我检查一下英语表达和内容是否得体,不要表现的我太幼稚.希望大家认真看看,
Hi XXX
It's July and I'm in my summer vacation in NJ now.How are you?
My vacation lasts about 2 months till 27th,August and besides getting an intership,I also would like to take some Germany classes which could last for a month.Therefore I would appreciate it if you can tell me how is the case going and the general time of the intership so I can arrange my time.
However,if my application is rejected or there doesn't seem to be a chance this time,It'll be OK,as the most important thing to me is learning more wherever I am.I will try to find myself a part-time job in NJ.
By the way,take care of yourself during the hot summer.
Looking forward to your feedback.
Have a nice day.
XXX