谁帮我点评一下我的英语作文!(别人说有很多英语错误,但是我却看不出来,
Several years ago,Lucy’s
father was diagnosed with cancer.And the disease not only brought her father,
but also brought all savings of the family.From then on,only her mother makes
money to support the whole unfortunately family.
She has a brother and they are
twins.Once a day,both of them received the entering notice to first-rate
university.But the family had been so poor since her father’s death.Her mother
had tried her best to raised money,but at last only one of the siblings had an
opportunity to attend university.She was desperate to go to university but had
to give up the chance because she loved her brother than
herself.
Even if
she had no regret making the decision,in fact,she still felt sad for missing
the opportunity and stayed alone in her living room. Her room was so poor.
There were no fashionable or newly house furnishings.and there was
nothing,except for the necessities—bed,chest and table.She was sitting the
corner and leaned against the chest.When got glimpse of a photo of her father
which lied on the table in front of her,she was missing her father
unconsciously.Tears were rolling down her face and she couldn’t stop sobbing.
After a while her mother sat next to her felt sorry for that and grasped her
palm and gave power to her hoped her to stop sorrowing.