这篇英语作文我写的对不?语法有没有错?

这篇英语作文我写的对不?语法有没有错?
希望帮忙修改修改,感觉句式很枯燥,要句式新颖滴~,意思不能变喽~
my friend
Jane is my good friend.She is a pretty girl.She has a big eyes,a small mouth,a small nose,strong white teeth and a ruddy complexion.her hair is straight and not curly hair,it has shoulder-length.She is so charming .
She is very diligent in her lessons and often praised by the teacher.She can also play the piano and sing sweet songs,and she is always smiling.
in the New Year's party,She was singing performance.
Although she has been transferred,but I still like her very much.