请高手帮我英文改错When I am sophomore I often study in the library an
请高手帮我英文改错
When I am sophomore I often study in the library and sit on same seat .About two months later I was surprised to find out th ere was a girl who had sit on the opposite seat was the same one then I prefer to watch her when I studied tired sometimes she felt my peep and she might looked at me puzzled I gave her a sunshine smile
Warm with the fancies of youth ,pretty with the issipid prettiness of the formative period and eye alight with certain natinve intelligence I make my mind I might be fall in love with the gril I went to the library eye time even rainy I regularity walk after her certainly she din not know
Another month past I can not bear I told myself I must told her I like her and take heart of grace all thine come those who wait t I catched a chance to walk with her and we talked a lot to the important I succeed to know her phone number that night was very sweetness and I knew that was just the beginess she become my girl friend
哎,我丢人,
When I was a sophomore,I often studied in the library and took the same seat .Two months later I was surprised to find the girl sitting in the opposite was the same one .I watched her when I was tired from studying .Sometimes she can felt my peep and looked at me in a puzzle.I gave her a sunshine smile in return.Driven by the feeling ,the passion ,the love .I felt I was falling in love with that girl .So I went to the library every day .I usually walk after her at a certain distance to make sure she did not find out.
Another month went by,and I could not bear this kind of feeling.I must told her I loved her!I seized a chance to walk along with her and we talked a lot.I managed to get her phone number.That night was really sweet and I knew that was just a little start .Finally,she became my girlfriend.
好象字数多了,需要压缩下，痛苦,怎么办,再改少点
When I am sophomore I often study in the library and sit on same seat .About two months later I was surprised to find out th ere was a girl who had sit on the opposite seat was the same one then I prefer to watch her when I studied tired sometimes she felt my peep and she might looked at me puzzled I gave her a sunshine smile
Warm with the fancies of youth ,pretty with the issipid prettiness of the formative period and eye alight with certain natinve intelligence I make my mind I might be fall in love with the gril I went to the library eye time even rainy I regularity walk after her certainly she din not know
Another month past I can not bear I told myself I must told her I like her and take heart of grace all thine come those who wait t I catched a chance to walk with her and we talked a lot to the important I succeed to know her phone number that night was very sweetness and I knew that was just the beginess she become my girl friend
哎,我丢人,
When I was a sophomore,I often studied in the library and took the same seat .Two months later I was surprised to find the girl sitting in the opposite was the same one .I watched her when I was tired from studying .Sometimes she can felt my peep and looked at me in a puzzle.I gave her a sunshine smile in return.Driven by the feeling ,the passion ,the love .I felt I was falling in love with that girl .So I went to the library every day .I usually walk after her at a certain distance to make sure she did not find out.
Another month went by,and I could not bear this kind of feeling.I must told her I loved her!I seized a chance to walk along with her and we talked a lot.I managed to get her phone number.That night was really sweet and I knew that was just a little start .Finally,she became my girlfriend.
好象字数多了,需要压缩下，痛苦,怎么办,再改少点
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When I was a sophomore, I often studied in the library and sat in same seat . About two months later, I was surprised to find out that a girl was always sat in the opposite seat. From then on, when I studied tired sometimes, I couldn't help to look at her. She felt my peep and she also looked at me puzzled in return. I gave her a sunshine smile.
I was warmed by the fancies of youth, and her insipid prettiness of puberty and eyelight with intelligence attracted me so much.(此处没看懂,我是凭自己理解改的)
I made up my mind that I might have been fall in love with the girl. I went to the library everyday, even in rainy days. I regularly walked following her. Of course, she didn't notice that.
Another month had passed. I could not wait to show her my love. I told myself I must told her that I liked her
and take heart of grace all thine come those who wait t (此句我实在没看懂)
I catched a chance to walk along with her and we talked a lot. The most important thing was that I succeeded to know her phone number. That night was very sweet and I knew it was just the beginning of her becoming my girl friend.
改了一遍,大概还算通顺,不过楼主里面有比较多的语法和拼写错误,且没有标点,我只能尽力理解了.其中有两处,我实在没看懂.如果你需要,把中文补充一下,看看可不可以帮你翻译一下.
爱情啊爱情~~
回答你的问题补充：
When I was a sophomore, I often studied in the library and took the same seat . Two months later I was surprised to find the girl sitting in the opposite was the same one . I watched her when I was tired from studying .Sometimes she can felt my peep and looked at me in a puzzle. I gave her a sunshine smile in return. Driven by the feeling ,the passion ,the love, I felt I had fallen in love with that girl . So I went to the library every day .I usually walk after her at a certain distance , making sure she did not notice that.
Another month went by, and I could not bear this kind of feeling.I seized a chance to walk along with her and we talked a lot. I managed to get her phone number. That night was really sweet and I knew that was just a little start .Finally, she became my girlfriend.
作了几个小小改动,删了一两句.不能再减了,已经很简约了.
I was warmed by the fancies of youth, and her insipid prettiness of puberty and eyelight with intelligence attracted me so much.(此处没看懂,我是凭自己理解改的)
I made up my mind that I might have been fall in love with the girl. I went to the library everyday, even in rainy days. I regularly walked following her. Of course, she didn't notice that.
Another month had passed. I could not wait to show her my love. I told myself I must told her that I liked her
and take heart of grace all thine come those who wait t (此句我实在没看懂)
I catched a chance to walk along with her and we talked a lot. The most important thing was that I succeeded to know her phone number. That night was very sweet and I knew it was just the beginning of her becoming my girl friend.
改了一遍,大概还算通顺,不过楼主里面有比较多的语法和拼写错误,且没有标点,我只能尽力理解了.其中有两处,我实在没看懂.如果你需要,把中文补充一下,看看可不可以帮你翻译一下.
爱情啊爱情~~
回答你的问题补充：
When I was a sophomore, I often studied in the library and took the same seat . Two months later I was surprised to find the girl sitting in the opposite was the same one . I watched her when I was tired from studying .Sometimes she can felt my peep and looked at me in a puzzle. I gave her a sunshine smile in return. Driven by the feeling ,the passion ,the love, I felt I had fallen in love with that girl . So I went to the library every day .I usually walk after her at a certain distance , making sure she did not notice that.
Another month went by, and I could not bear this kind of feeling.I seized a chance to walk along with her and we talked a lot. I managed to get her phone number. That night was really sweet and I knew that was just a little start .Finally, she became my girlfriend.
作了几个小小改动,删了一两句.不能再减了,已经很简约了.
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