一篇作文sep sunday sunnyIt's very fine,today.so there was a outd

一篇作文
sep sunday sunny
It's very fine,today.so there was a outdoor activity.Firstly,we went to the park by school bus at 7:20 p.m.And at 9:30,we arrived at the destination.Secondly.we were swimming,it's so nice.Because swimming is my favorite sport.After lunch,had a good rest and we told stories by English.Finally,in park,we took photos each other.About 5:30,we still took school bus to go home.What a good day!有错吗
we arrived at the destination at 9.30
After lunch ,we told stories by English while having a good rest
Finally,we took photos each other in park
这样有语病吗 就是把其中的几个句子稍作改动了
怎么修改更好 容易得分