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Music likes sunshine that shines through my heart which is made of tears and ices, it'll gradually convert the tears and ices into the soft and warm seawater.
Every music contains an idea, when I listen to a music, I can feel what the musician and singer 《wanna是口语化的要改为 want to》 tell me ,it feels like a lot of warm seawater around me. I feels that I have melted the ices of my heart and seen the enthusiastic heart of the musician and the singer.
Every music is like a present which is sent to me by the God ,when I listen to it every time,I want to cry .the musical soul likes the flame and the water, wherever you are ,it‘ll always sleep in your inner heart.