英语作文评析,三级水平,正文如下,请指出错误,评改有道理的追加,

英语作文评析,三级水平,正文如下,请指出错误,评改有道理的追加,
Dear Gina,
I’m your friend,Wang Ye.In you letter,you say you want me show some photos to you about my holiday.Here are some of my photos.In the first photo,I’m doing my homework; in the second photo,I’m playing computer games,it’s very exciting; in the next photo,I’m playing snow with my friends,we’re very happy; in the last photo,I’m listening to music,that’s made me feel very relaxed.
How about you?Can you show me some photo about your holiday?
Yours,
Wang Ye