大家好我对考研应用文打分不是很了解,所以自己写了很多篇但不知道是什么水平,请大家帮我看一篇顺便打个分

大家好我对考研应用文打分不是很了解,所以自己写了很多篇但不知道是什么水平,请大家帮我看一篇顺便打个分
Dear sir or madam,
I am a candidate of vacation of your firm.However,I am discouraged seriously in the interview,so I write this letter in order to let you take a better acquaince to your company.
The primary reasons for my writing are as follows.Firstly,your company’s interviewers may be too strict and indifferent to blame almost all appliants.Secondly,it is essential that one person live and work with self-confidence,nevertheless interviewers don’t believe so,and they always frustrate candidates in irony words,which make persons lose their confidence.Lastly,provided interviewers keep this attitude to every appliant ,maybe your company’s reputation will be influenced negatively.
I would like to express my gratitude for your consideration of measures as regards this phenomenon.i am looing forward to hearing from you.
Yours sincerely,
Li Ming