假如你是李军,你打算和父母去北京旅游,Red Star 旅行社为你们提供全程服务,请你根据以下提示给Red Star旅行
假如你是李军,你打算和父母去北京旅游,Red Star 旅行社为你们提供全程服务,请你根据以下提示给Red Star旅行社主管Mr Zang 写一封电子邮件,咨询以下；提示；【①旅行车上的游客数量】【②宾馆是否有带大窗户的三人间】【③宾馆附近是否有游泳池】④【饭菜是否可口,种类多样】
下面是几篇作文,选哪个比较好,语法错误低?
Dear Mr.Zang,This is Li Jun.I got a plan which is travel to BeiJing with my parents.I'm going to be in your travel agency-Red Star.I have some questions for you.How many tourist in one travel bus?Is there a triple room with big windows?Is there a swimming pool nearby the hotel?Is the food delicious and many kinds of?Could you send me back and answer these question?Thank you.Sincerely,Li Jun.
Mr.zhang:Hello.My parents and I will go to Beijing tourism.How much is the number of consult Red Star travel agency travel tourists on board?The hotel have three rooms with big windows?Whether luxury?Is there a swimming pool near the hotel?My parents and I are going to swim.What food?If Coca?There is no real shrimp I loveIf you can provide the answers to the questions above,Li Jun
【【第一个当范文比较好,还是第二个?重点是有没有语法错误,20 注意如果更好的有个别错误麻烦修改一下,
下面是几篇作文,选哪个比较好,语法错误低?
Dear Mr.Zang,This is Li Jun.I got a plan which is travel to BeiJing with my parents.I'm going to be in your travel agency-Red Star.I have some questions for you.How many tourist in one travel bus?Is there a triple room with big windows?Is there a swimming pool nearby the hotel?Is the food delicious and many kinds of?Could you send me back and answer these question?Thank you.Sincerely,Li Jun.
Mr.zhang:Hello.My parents and I will go to Beijing tourism.How much is the number of consult Red Star travel agency travel tourists on board?The hotel have three rooms with big windows?Whether luxury?Is there a swimming pool near the hotel?My parents and I are going to swim.What food?If Coca?There is no real shrimp I loveIf you can provide the answers to the questions above,Li Jun
【【第一个当范文比较好,还是第二个?重点是有没有语法错误,20 注意如果更好的有个别错误麻烦修改一下,
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Dear Mr.Zang,
This is Li Jun. I plan to travel to BeiJing with my parents. We are going to enjoy the service of your Red Star travel agency. I have some concerns,please help me. How many tourists in one travel bus? Is there a three-bed room with a big window? Is there a swimming pool close to the hotel? Is the food delicious and many kinds of? Could you reply me and answer these question? Thank you.
Sincerely,
Li Jun.
Dear Mr.Zang,
This is Li Jun. I plan to travel to BeiJing with my parents. We are going to enjoy the service of your Red Star travel agency. I have some concerns,please help me. How many tourists in one travel bus? Is there a three-bed room with a big window? Is there a swimming pool close to the hotel? Is the food delicious and many kinds of? Could you reply me and answer these question? Thank you.
Sincerely,
Li Jun.
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