英语翻译好冷,雪已经积得那么深merry christmas to you,我深爱的人好冷,整个冬天在你家门are yo

我的拙作：
A cold winter,
deeply snow-covered.
Merry Christmas to you,my beloved.
The cold winter,
I'm still standing at your door.
Are you my snowman?
I'm waiting,missing,mooning.
Snowflakes,sift softly on the ground,
telling me we should never part.
I'm falling into you.
Can you feel my broken heart?
Snowflakes,sift softly on the ground,
while some are still whirling in the sky.
Coming is the spring,
dying am I.
第一段压了一点小韵呵呵；第二段就没办法了,时间有限；第三段以及第四段中均是第二句和第四句压韵.第四段的最后两句话用了诗歌语言中常见的倒装.总体是意译,不过基本上是做到了句句对应的.