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My birthday
Today is my birthday. I have a birthday party. My family and friends.
今天是我的生日。我有一个生日派对。我的家人和朋友都来了。
We eat Hot pot. Lamb, fish, chicken, mushrooms...... Very delicious. We are happy to talk with.
我们先吃了火锅。有羊肉，鱼，鸡，蘑菇。。。。。。非常美味。我们愉快的交谈着。

Then we open the cake box. Turn out the light. Inserted the candle. I made a wish, "I want candy, ice cream cake, hamburgers, cola...... (all good food) I want to be a cartoonist and psychologists." We eat chocolate cake. Chocolate cake is very delicious. Ice cream cake and chocolate cake, I love the most.
然后我们打开蛋糕盒。关上了灯。插上了蜡烛。我许了愿，“我想要糖果，冰淇凌蛋糕，汉堡，可乐。。。。。。（所有好的食物）我想当一个漫画家和心理学家。”我们吃了巧克力蛋糕。巧克力蛋糕也很美味。我最喜欢冰淇凌蛋糕和巧克力蛋糕。

This time 7 points. The days are dark. Friends should go. We all say goodbye. I have a very happy birthday.
这个时候7点了。天也黑了。朋友们该走了。大家都说再见。生日我过得很开心。