英语厉害的 帮我修改一下作文好吗

Welcome to our city
Our city is very beautiful and convenient.It has something for everyoe(everyone).
If you are looking for restaurant,there are a lot of restaurants like KFC.Do you like eat fried food?If you like,I think KFC is just suit(for) you fine.KFC has lots of food that is delicious.If you want to eat hamburgers or Frech fries,you should go to zhe(the) KFC.You will like the restaurant,even though it’s a little expensive.If you want to have a meal with some food that the daily life of a family,you should go to zhe(the) LaiDaBao.Food is delicious and cheap there,so you don’t worry about money with(of) you is not enough.
If you are looking for parks,there are also a lot of parks like Dong Hui Park.Dong Hui Park is for young people to visit,and there is a famous buliding called Dong Hui Ge.Hu Shan Park is for adults.There is a skate(skating) rink for people to skate,but it’s not free.And there are a lot of trees so the air is fresh.Jin Pin Park is for kids.There are many recreation facilities including roller coaster,sliding board and more.If you want to go there ,you should take some money with(这里的with正确,只需注意从属关系即可) you .And you’d be better to go there with you parents （这句错的不应该!是had better do sth.的固定用法,应改为 And you'd better go there with your parents.）.
If you are looking for department store.I think you should go to Ren Ben supermarket orSan He supermarket.Because those supermarkets have different kinds of things.Almost everything you want ,you can find it there.And the price of things is not very expensive.
Do you enjoy our city Do you want to visit the beautiful and convenient city
基本上没多大的错误!但是这里有个知识点你没记住噢!
即 had better do sth.这是固定用法!