批改雅思小作文As can be seen,the chart illustrates the 25-year peri

批改雅思小作文
As can be seen,the chart illustrates the 25-year period,spanning from the year of 1979 to 2004,brings the circumstance of fish and varies kinds of meat consumption in a European country to the light.
From 1979 to 1984,there appeared a wide fluctuate in the number of beef consumed by each person per week,which slumped sharply under 200 grams and then rallied above 200.Then the beef consumption fluctuated with overall downward trend between 1984 and 2004,and stayed at approximate 100 grams in 2004.
On the other hand,the number of lamb and chicken consumption developed in two opposite trends from 1979 to 2004 which both were 150 grams per person per week initially.Then,the number of chicken consumption surge and the lamb consumption subside with mild waves,and stopped at round about 250 and 50 grams respectively in 2004.
Ultimately,the number of fish consumption stayed gloomy from the beginning to the end which was 50 grams approximately.
In a nutshell,it is possible to speculate that the consumption of lamb and beef may keep reducing,whereas the consumption of chicken may keep increasing,and fish consumption may stay morose.
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