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The chart below illustrated the situation of consumption on different items between 5 european countries in 2002.
Based on the figures shown,a hallmerk which should be noted was that food including drinks and tobacco maintained the largest expenditure from the minimal 15.77% to the maximal 32.14%.Ranting the middle place of the 3 object,clothing and footwear kept in the scope of 5.40% to 9%.The lowest spending which only stand 1.98% to 4.35% was leisure and education.
In accordance with the statistics supplied ,it is manifest that cost in eating and enjoying in Turky(32.14%)which was particularly surpass than any other countries was almost twice as much as the same cost in Italy(16.36%).As for education ,the gap between Trukey(4.35%) and Spain(1.98%) was tiny.There was still approximately 4% disparities before Sweden(5.4%)catch up Italy(9%)while other countries at the average of 6%.
From the analysis given before,a conclusion could be easily drew that the consumption occupied the highest status of budget,which also means education need to gain more attention from the country.
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