大型英文大赛朗诵组自我介绍（听听大家意见）

文章总体写得不错,现改一下,供你参考.
Good morning ,everyone!It's my honour to stand here to tell you something about me（虽是“自我介绍”,但换成tell you something about me更符合英语的习惯） .My name is Zhang Tianlong,and you can call me Robin.I'm ___years old.There are three people in my family,my father,my mother and I（这样表达更简洁,地道）.I think the meaning of FAMILY should be"Father and Mother,I Love You".I love my parents and they love me too(加上此句,以承接上面family的含义) Now,I am studying in _____ Primary (某学校的首字母要大写)School.（People say 省去,“人们说...”是汉语的说法,直译成英语显得别扭）I'm a lovely boy with a sweet smile .In my spare time,I like ________(例如reading books).Of course,I like challenging myself ,so I take part in the competition and try to become a master of a foreign language.I like making friends too（加上too更显英语味道）,I hope I can make friends with you(加上此句以承上启下) and learn from all of you(虽然是像其它选手学习是你心里的话,可说出来不必说得那么具体,用 all of you涵盖,既得体,又大气) in this competition.Now,I'll tell you a story about______.

Thay are father mother and I. 改成me

Thay are father mother and I
改成
Thay are my father my mother and I。
其余还是很完美的。

小学A组 就是一年级, 能说这些已经很棒了

对于小学生来说不错了~~

Good morning ，everyone! It's my honour to stand here to introduce myself (正式场合你这么说其实蛮好).
My name is Zhang Tianlong, and you can call me Robin (习惯是这么说的).
I'm ___years old. There are three peop...

很不错了，比起我以前强好多！真的Very good

3行they打错了
I think the meaning of FAMILY is"Father and Mother I Love You". 这句是不是有点问题？
People say 这里最好把say改为said
总的来说不错了
祝你成功！！！

小学生自我介绍，这样已经非常不错了，我觉得可以，没啥可吹毛求疵的

There are three people in my family, my father, mother and I.
I like challenging myself,so I took part in the competition to become a master in this foreign language.

句式没有变化，以i开头太多，
Hello,girls and boys,ladies and gentlemen!Do you think I'm a big sun boy（偷笑）？Zhang tianlong is my name,haha,but friends call me Robin，you know a tallent part .I have been in the wor...

转折部分非常牵强，句子和句子的含义完全没有衔接的地方。如果我是评委，我会说这是堆积句子，不是一段自我介绍。比如说，“我喜欢读书。当然，我也喜欢挑战自我......”，中文演讲比赛中谁会这么说话呢。还有“FAMILY”的含义，“父亲母亲我爱你”，说完了含义至少应该把话题转到自己身上吧，比如说加上“我爱我的父母/我爱我的家”之类的，怎么直愣愣的就跳到我在哪里哪里读书了呢。
另外，“so I t...