kaixuanhe
幼苗
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Do you know our school life could be dangerous if we are not careful enough. For example, one day, two students ran after each other in the hallway. Suddenly, one of them fell down and hurt his leg because of the wet floor. Therefore, he had to stay in the hospital for two weeks. So I think students should always walk but not run in the hallways. And the teachers had better keep one eye on the students after class and stop them from running. At last , I hope all the students should pay attention to their safety in school.
考生首先要认真阅读前面的提示认真审题,确定文章的中心。注意文章文体、人称和时态。本文主要应用一般过去式叙述一件发生在学校的意外事件。根据情景的发展,按顺序安排好材料。同时应选用合适的连接词或过渡词,使文章具有一定的连贯性。温馨提醒:考生必须认真查验是否有漏写情况,有无拼写错误及标点误用等。
【亮点说明】本文观点分明,论证了学校安全的必要性。本文用到了征求建议的语气I think students should always walk but not run in the hallways.这些词组的运用也让文章增色不少。提出了学生和老师在学校应怎么注意安全。
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