我要向加拿大学校问些问题，用英语，不知道有没有错误或者哪里写的不恰当的。帮忙改错。。谢谢

我要向加拿大学校问些问题，用英语，不知道有没有错误或者哪里写的不恰当的。帮忙改错。。谢谢
Thank you for your e-mail. I took the SSAT in Oct.18th in Shanghai. I have attached the test score here for your reference. It was not very high, but I think my English has improved during the last 4 months. Should I take the SSAT again or take the test of St. George’s?
Also, I'm going to visit Vancouver during the spring festival(Feb.19th-Feb.24th) and I want to visit your school. could you please arrange an appropriate day for me?

Sincerely,

范尼斯特鲁伊 1年前已收到3个回答举报

名法师甚494 幼苗

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Thank you for your e-mail. I took the SSAT in Oct.18th in Shanghai. I have attached the test score here for your reference. It was not very high, but I think my English has improved during the last 4 ...

1年前

去归山在幼苗

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同学你好，St. George's是温哥华一所很不错的私校，你眼光不错哦~
几个小错误：
- on Oct 18th, 2014 -- 应该用ON，另外建议你说清楚年份。
- 注意festival和上括号之间应该有空格
- 注意could you的C应该大写，因为是句首（这些虽然都是小地方，但是对方会注重你对细节的把握）
建议：最后一句话的问法...

1年前

anitalxj 春芽

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呃。怎么说呢。

It was not very high，一般没这么说的。改成，Though it's not very ideal 就好。

Should I take the SSAT one more time or take the test of St. George’s instead?

最后一句没看懂啊，好像没什么必要，大学有开放日的，你随时去都可以。如果你想见相关的人的话应该说。Please arrange a meeting date for us on my visit.

1年前

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