鄙人的英语作文。。。求大神批改修正完善

鄙人的英语作文。。。求大神批改修正完善
题目 Using Media in Class
On May 20th,2014,a modern class full of new technology was held in Hefei No.1 Middle School.It was the first class in Hefei to use Ipads,combining the media with the models of traditional educations.
It is this try that promotes the argument between the supporters and opponents.
The optimistic argue that new equipments can help students build great imagination.Not only can the attempts make the book easy to understand,but also,they believe,improve students' grades.
On the contrary,some people of pessimism emphasize the disadvantages of the media class. With equipments showing pictrues and voices,students may try little to think on their own.Moreover,depending on the media too much probably causes the difficulty in reading many well-known novels.
However,it is a opportunity to transform the models of education. Though there are lots of problems to solve,in my considered opinion,we should have confidence in this audacious try. It is sure that the media can catch students' eyes and impress them a lot.
After all,to fit active minds of today's teenagers,the media class is merely one try.
就这么多。。。求大神修改