求大神帮我完善这篇英语作文Finding my self-ego on the top of the teaching

求大神帮我完善这篇英语作文
Finding my self-ego on the top of the teaching building
On the first day of English class, our teacher assigned
special homework. The top of homework is climbing the top of
the teaching building to find my self-ego. To be honest, I
was surprised that our teacher wanted us to do this. But I
decided to try my best to finish the assignment.
In order to do this homework, I picked a nice day to
visit our school. I walked along school road, feeling
comfortable. It was the first time that I saw the scenery of
campus carefully. The campus is bigger than I
imagined. And I love the lawn in front of the teaching
building. I hadn't ever saw so big lawn in school. We can enjoy ourselves in lawn. The sun is
going down. I walked to the teaching building
quickly. I took to the stage step by step. When I stood on the top of the teaching building, I have a sense of
pride, as if I had finished a great thing. The beauty of
the campus became small in my eyes. And at that moment, I
realized that I entered the university and became a college student. Blowing breeze, I felt full of power. It was
a meaningful thing!
After climbing the top of the teaching building, not
only can I saw the scenery of the campus, but also I find my self-ego. I am not afraid of the future. I think I will
spend a happy time in school. 原作文是这样,评语是作者词汇表达较为熟练,学术词汇使用不是很多；句法知识很棒,若增加一些从句的使用,文章会更出色；衔接成分太少,文章结构欠佳 ,求大神帮改改QAQ