老刀-把子
幼苗
共回答了13个问题采纳率:92.3% 举报
第一句,我觉得用人做主语,用主动语态更好.
第三句,可以改成 i don't know how long i can go in being a funny totor.
第六句,改成 i can't find anywhere i wanna go./ i don't wanna go anywhere.
第七句,后半句应还是用we作主语.可以改成 ,even though we sometimes get criticized by others.
第八句,可以改成,mom,u as well as dad are my best friends who will walk further together with me in life.
第九句,little friend,u need to study hard to mske progress everyday.
个人意见.
1年前
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