八年级英语作文,关于友谊的作文,

AN UNFORGETABLE THING
Everyone has his unforgetable things.Friendship may be the most impotant thing in our life .It's like a light giving us brightness .I have many things that I can't forget with my friends.
One day ,i showed a new watch to my best friend Kathy.The watch was very pretty and I liked it very much.When I passed it to her ,she dropped it and the watch crashed into pieces .i shouted to her:"I don't want to see you again ."She cried at once.After school ,I found a pretty pencilcase in my desk .In the pencilcase ,I found a note which said:"Dear Annie ,I gave this to you because i don't want to lose you .Can you forgive me?"I was moved by the note and I felt regret with my words.I said sorry to her and we were closer than before .
A friend is like a star in sky ,he always is there around you.I can't forget this thing forever.
亲啊,你题目是不是想说一件难忘的事啊?如果是的话题目就弄错了,是unforgetable啊.其实文章没什么大问题,不过要注意代词的使用还有文章的时态.

对于英文作文，我无语啊......

“Everyone has his can't forget things”改为“Every has his things that he could't forget”;
“It's like a light give us bright .”改为“It likes a light”;
“ I felt regret with my words”改为“to my word“
“he always is there around you. ”改为“He has been in my side.”

has his can't改成 doesn't ' 我' 用大写字母 I