麻烦大家帮我改下文章（英语）My best friend is Liu Yang.His birthday is the

麻烦大家帮我改下文章（英语）
My best friend is Liu Yang.His birthday is the fifteenth of March.He is fourteen years old.His height is 155cm.He lives in Jiang Yin.He only have one cousin.His father is a doctor.His favourite subject is Chinese .He likes playing computer games.He often does his homework after school.He usually plays computer games at the weekend.His favourite sport is basketball.His favorite day of the week is Sunday.He likes Spring Festival best.His favourite season is summer.He likes eating hamburgers best,and he does not like rice.
要初一水平差不多,语法错误也帮我改下
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古灵精怪23 幼苗

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Liu Yang is my best friend.His birthday is the fifteenth of March.He is now 14 years old.He is 155cm tall.He lives in Jiangyin.He has only one cousin.His father is a doctor.Chinese is his favorite subject.He likes playing computer games,so he does his homework after school and usually plays computer games at the weekends.He likes sports too.He likes basketball.Sunday is the best day he thinks and summer is the best season.He likes Spring Festival the most.His favorite food is hamburgers,oh,he hates rice.

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虫小白 幼苗

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语法本身错误不多，可是你的简单句太多了。总是 he is开头。 这样的文章很不好看的。 你可以试着用点从句，比方第一句，可以写成My best friend is Liu Yang who is a fourteen-year-old boy, borned on 15th March... 试着这样再写一遍吧

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dd的忧郁症 幼苗

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My best friend is Liu Yang.His birthday is on the fifteenth of March(on March 15th).He is fourteen years old.His height is 155cm.He lives in Jiangyin.He has only one cousin.His father is a doctor.

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tiangang_gt001 幼苗

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语法错误：the fifteenth of March->Mar.15th
那样写有点流水帐的感觉，建议不要用那么多的he, his,应多用连词。介绍时要注意逻辑（出生背景，家庭情况，个人特征），还有要注意详略结合。以下为更改版本：(按初一的水平，只能改成这样啦）
My best friend is Liu Yang.He was born in Mar.15th and he...

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