关于环保的英语作文,我高一的学生,写的考场作文,有个草稿,我给您看看.请资深的英语老师看看,

关于环保的英语作文,我高一的学生,写的考场作文,有个草稿,我给您看看.请资深的英语老师看看,
25分作文,能得多少分?开头部分省略了.Some students always waste water ,some students don't turn off the light when they leave the classroom ,others throw recycle cup and old books.I think ,they don't realise how important the environmentally friendly is.But it doesn't their own mistakes,also it's related to our school.Our school should educate students the importance of environmentally friendly .As for us ,we should take responsibility to protect our environment.We should take off the light when we leave classroom and recycle use the old things.If everyone can do these,I believe that our school will be more and more beautiful .Let's go for it!
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yinbin913 幼苗

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开头写得好没错误的话15——17分
开头不行的话10——15分.正文里有几个语法错误;而且你的逻辑有点怎么说表达不到位导致结构很诡异.例如But it doesn't their own mistakes,also it's related to our school. 你想表达的是这不仅是他们的错也和学校教育不当有关.可是你写出来的是,这不是他们的错,也和学校有关.因为你连词没用到位造成的.
比17分高的话你就来揍我吧~

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那等几天成绩出来看喽~ 我作文就没怎么下过17分的。你不要用太高的眼光去看我,我毕竟只是高一学生。 哈哈哈,成绩出来了 20分!!!

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不是吧~= =太水了吧~想当年我写的比这好也没那么高啊!

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这又不是高考,当然很松~
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