请大家帮我看下这篇对话语法是有错误.

请大家帮我看下这篇对话语法是有错误.
我想根据《假话真情》那个小品改成一个英语话剧.下面是我翻译的一部分.请大家我帮我看看是否与语法错误?
True lies
Figures(人物)：
Father：Tom（T） Daughter:Susan (S)
Little daughter:Jenny (J) Son:Michel (M)
Aside (旁白) On a sunny morning,old Tom is sitting in a wheel chair.He seems to be sad.
T:Though I am sitting in a wheelchair.I am quite fine.My legs are as strong as twenty years ago.You may asked why you do that.A great question.I have two draughts,Susan,Jenny and a son Michel.Susan is a teacher.Jenny is a singer.And Michel is an owner of a shop.Someone usually says to me,“ Tom,you are so lucky to have so many kids.And all of them are very successful in their own fields.” But I feel lonely now and then.They haven’t visited me for hundreds of years.What I need is quite simple.I want them to stay with me,have a small talk,watch tv ,have a meal.and so on.It’s wonderful .By the way,today is my birthday.I bet they have no idea about that.They completely forget it .yes,they are busy.Busy….So,I pretend to be ill and give them a call.I will make them cry as they see I am sitting in a wheelchair.It must be a great surprise.Ha ha ha ….
Aside:Susan is coming ...hurriedly with tears in her face.
S:Dad,Dad,what’s the matter with you?Are you ok?How do you sit in a wheelchair?What’s wrong with your legs?
T:( pretend to be sad) I ‘m fine.Susan.It ‘s just about my leg.One of them is broken.I sorry to bother you,l know you are busy…..
S:Dad,please,Don’t say that.I am sorry… How can you stand up,dad?( surprise )
T:Yeah,How can I stand up?
Aside:Michel is coming hurriedly.
M:Dad,dad,what’s the matter with you legs?How do you sit in a wheelchair.
S; Dad’s leg is broken,Michel.
S&M.:Dad ,Dad.(cry…..)
T:(暗乐道) Yes,bingo.
M：But where is your the other leg?
T：Good question.I can’t find it,too.Come on,Where is my leg?Who cut it off from my body.Oh,my God.
S:Wait,dad ,It’s you leg here.Just under you body.
T:Thank goodness.I find it at last.
M:Take it out,Dad.Is it false Oh ,Jesus,It’s amazing.
Aside:Jenny is coming too,with tears in her face.
J:Dad,dad,What’s the matter with your legs?How do you sit in a wheelchair?What’s going on?Who can tell me?
S:Come on,Jenny,Why are you so late?Dad’s leg is broken?
J:I’m sorry.I am preparing for the performance.Dad,how do your legs become broken?The false leg also has flesh.Does it have feeling.(beat Tom’s leg)
T:Ouch,Why do you hit my leg?This one is real.
M:Dad,Which one do you feel uncomfortable?
T; This one .
M:The left.What’s your feeling?
T:Numb.(麻的)
M：Numb?
T:My leg was squeezed for quite a long time.
M:Who did it?How dare he to do that?
T:It’s me.It’s my body .
J:Can you still walk?Dad.
M:Right,can you still walk?
T:I don’t know./ I have no idea.
S.&J:Dad,just try .try to walk.
能说具体点吗？