请哪位老师帮忙修改一下英语作文,指出错误,

请哪位老师帮忙修改一下英语作文,指出错误,
Do you always spend pocket money in buying a lot of things that you don’t need?Do you use it as your wish?I’d like to tell you about now to use the pocket money.
First,we can put it in the bank.It’s a good way to save money.Second we can buy some books we are interested in.
If you have other interests,such as physical education,music and stamp collecting,just enjoy them with the money.
So,my friends,using pocket money properly can give you a pleasant life.